Story Challenge – Write a Story in Less than 100 words

Today’s challenger is Stuart Pereira and his response to the challenge to ‘write a story in less than one hundred words’ comes in the form of Perfect Day. I like the sound of that. You can read Perfect Day below.

Perfect Day

Dave watches his float for signs of a nibble, an electric blue Damselfly hovers close to the fat frog basking on a lily pad. Long, sticky, frog-tongue flashes. The blue light is extinguished.

The grass snake slithers silently into the shallows, threading through the tall, yellow-flowered Flag Irises. She strikes from behind. It’s over in a heartbeat.

Frog clamped in her jaws, she swims for the shore. A stroke short of the bank the pike pounces, swallows snake and victim in a single gulp.

Three hours later, Dave reels in the pike.

Perfect end to a perfect day.

98 words

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I thought this story had some beautiful language. The rhythm in Stuart’s sentences and wonderful images conjure up relaxation. What do you think?

One thought on “Story Challenge – Write a Story in Less than 100 words

  1. Geoff Parkes July 7, 2019 / 7:45 pm

    Loved it, Stuart. But who swallowed Dave?

    Liked by 1 person

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